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Dan ([personal profile] muchtooarrogant) wrote in [personal profile] tamara_in_jakarta 2024-07-13 02:40 am (UTC)

I appreciate happy endings, and was glad your story had one. :)

I hope you won't mind an observation. As I read your piece, your writing seemed to grow smoother as the story progressed. It occurred to me that you might have intended that, to reflect the character's growing happiness and security, but I wasn't sure.

Dan

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